“But yours— it’s 75%” made my stomach drop. I actually felt my brain go cold for a second, like the room got smaller. I hate how fast that line turns everything, no warning.
Oooh this is interesting. I actually thought it was building up towards her taking a driving test, but I'm reading this correctly this is a dystopian type of ending where the state has bureaucratized grief into some type of test and procedure. Look forward to seeing where this goes.
This is a fascinating start. Looking forward to learning Jyoti´s backstory and how she deals with her diagnosis.
“But yours— it’s 75%” made my stomach drop. I actually felt my brain go cold for a second, like the room got smaller. I hate how fast that line turns everything, no warning.
Thanks so much for reading and sharing your thoughts! This is a special story for me, and I'm glad that my concept had an impact on you.
Oooh this is interesting. I actually thought it was building up towards her taking a driving test, but I'm reading this correctly this is a dystopian type of ending where the state has bureaucratized grief into some type of test and procedure. Look forward to seeing where this goes.
Wayne
Yup, the state is saying that there's a limit to how much grief one can feel. I hope you'll enjoy the upcoming two parts.